Dew drops that once glorified her beauty,
Now turns to air,
Bringing a scar on her face,
That wasn't even there.
For she's standing rooted to this ground
Where once there were more like her, all around.
Fighting the Sun. Fighting the heat.
Fighting hard against her defeat.
Drying Leaf.
Dying Leaf.
She falls down after all.
Her end as a means
for us to enjoy the Fall.
How sinful can we be...
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Based on what's going on right now =/
5 comments:
I really relly really like this one! Tho it's sad that it's about a real situation. :/
I like it that you made the "leaf" (dunno how much of a metaphor it is really) a kind of a person. It makes the sad message even more powerful a shock. (shocking AND beautiful! that's not something anyone can do)
"Drying Leaf.
Dying Leaf.
She falls down after all.
Her end as a means
for us to enjoy the Fall."
Smart rhyming and well selected and organized words. The entirety works, no doubt of that ^^
Wow, I love it. It just drew me in at the first line. Agree with FR, that stanza is just :o
I've been missing your poetry, nice to be back here :)
aww you guys! ^^
Rose, thanks a lot, that really meant a hell of a lot to me! thank you.
Becc, feels great to have you back too ! ^^
this is awesome! :) loved it :)
thank you roccari! ^^
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